LockHeart Co-Admin
Number of posts : 780 Age : 30 Quote : We all see the brightest stars. But sometimes, the most beautiful star is the one we can't see.~me Warning : Nick-Name : Lilea/ Ravenclaw/ Meave/ Magicka Registration date : 2008-11-01
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| Subject: The Chase Sat Aug 15, 2009 12:42 am | |
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They’re right behind me I can hear them running they’re coming closer And I don’t have to look back to know.
My blood rushes like race cars my legs move in a blur I can hear my heart in my head I can feel my stomach twisting in knots.
I’m moving as fast as light but why are they getting closer? They’re breathing in my ear I can already feel them capture me.
I have to move faster I pump my legs harder I force myself past my own limits the world zooming past me in a flash.
Dodging obstacles in my way hoping they will slow my hunters down Jumping, ducking, and Kris-crossing I can’t afford to lose a step.
So close, so close to my freedom I can taste it, I can feel it it’s just at the tip of my fingers The light, my safety, it’s almost killing me it’s so close.
Ruff hands on my arms Darkness shadowing my exit dragging me, pulling me away reversing my tracks I once stepped in.
I don’t always win I don’t always get away Once I get into trouble I may not be so fortunate as to get out....
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Kifu Admin
Number of posts : 2986 Age : 29 Quote : I'm baking pillows. Burn them slowly, keeps them fluffy! Mmmmmm, pillows. Warning : Nick-Name : Abby Registration date : 2008-08-18
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| Subject: Re: The Chase Sat Aug 15, 2009 10:47 am | |
| I likes. Very descriptive and I almost felt victory, and then disappointment that you (the character) didn't get out. | |
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Lara Scrap
Number of posts : 173 Age : 29 Quote : Turn your face to the sun and the shadows fall behind you. ~ Maori Proverb Warning : Registration date : 2008-12-01
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| Subject: Re: The Chase Sat Aug 15, 2009 6:06 pm | |
| Wow I really like it! You did a great job explaining what is going on in the poem. You can relate to the person. I love it!! | |
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