Kifu
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 |  Subject: Help Me..., Brother  Fri Dec 26, 2008 10:37 pm | |
| December 26, 2008; Friday Help Me..., Brother Alone Stranded In the dark No one to trust Not even myself Scrambling Reaching Tears stinging Cries caught in my throat I need solidity Past ganging up Drowning Weakening My hope is lost You have left me ...Again I loved you Tremble Shudder My soul has died You have left me Your back is turned I have died You knew But didn't... ...Help... ...Me... ___________________________ Story behind poem:All freaking day I've been reading those dang MNT comics. They've brought me down in the dumps more than once today (and yesterday). My latest down was recorded by me writing this peom. So this is a response to my feelings to the comics. Really I think this was in Raph's prospective, not sure. He was begging Leo, I think. I don't know really. I wrote it, I recorded it. That was my job, that's all. Read those, maybe, possibly, but I don't ask you to waste your days reading something you don't even like. W/e you have to do, I want construtive responses, even if you have or have not read them. I've gotten to chapter 16: The Leader. | |
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Megido/martha3
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| | Subject: Re: Help Me..., Brother Thu Mar 19, 2009 10:02 pm | |
| Yikes! I love it, but it hits a little too close for me. When I read it it reminded me of when my brother and parents would argue all night, and I thought he was going to leave. 
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Kifu
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| | Subject: Re: Help Me..., Brother Fri Mar 20, 2009 6:50 am | |
| Wow.... I'm glad you found a deeper meaning than I ever intended to include... but I'm sorry that I unearthed something as terrible as that! Well, good luck with your family, my friend. | |
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| | Subject: Re: Help Me..., Brother Thu Aug 06, 2009 7:57 am | |
| really good its kinda deep but i like lol! | |
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| | Subject: Re: Help Me..., Brother Fri Sep 04, 2009 4:07 pm | |
| The style is smooth and the word choice is good. Very nice, fits both the comic and life, excellent job. :fhighfive: | |
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| | Subject: Re: Help Me..., Brother Fri Sep 04, 2009 4:09 pm | |
|  Thanks. | |
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