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Number of posts : 780 Age : 30 Quote : We all see the brightest stars. But sometimes, the most beautiful star is the one we can't see.~me Warning : Nick-Name : Lilea/ Ravenclaw/ Meave/ Magicka Registration date : 2008-11-01
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| Subject: Wicked Shadow Wed May 20, 2009 6:37 pm | |
| The only place my shadow can't follow me is: the light. The sweet holy brightness that surrounds me Light scares away my shadow My dark, evil, being The light keeps me safe from the stalker, The follower that walks along my side
I now crouch in a corner Filled with a pure white and intense glow No shadow in front, or behind But... this citadel of darkness still surrounds my brighter corner As long as I'm in the light... it cannot harm
That shadow, that wicked shadow It watches me, it stares at me It waits for the light to scatter away It wants me, to rid me of my illuminated soul No... I will not let that happen
Hissing, hissing with anger, It cannot reach me I am safe hear Protected from the darkness
My light...My light... What is happening? It's... It's withering away! NO! NO! It's dimming into the darkness! My shadow smiles slyly Oh how I hate that maleficent, bloody smile
Curling up tighter... Tighter in the corner The light is slipping away NO! NO! The shadows are getting closer
The laughter, such hateful laughter So triumphant, but very evil So proud, but horribly demonic
Closer, it's coming closer NO! Get away! Go! Leave me be! The light... My safety... It is gone...
With final laugh, a final chuckle, It takes me away Claw like hands, digging into my skin Dragging me with it, it takes me away Far far away to my..... | |
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Number of posts : 2986 Age : 29 Quote : I'm baking pillows. Burn them slowly, keeps them fluffy! Mmmmmm, pillows. Warning : Nick-Name : Abby Registration date : 2008-08-18
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| Subject: Re: Wicked Shadow Wed May 20, 2009 6:39 pm | |
| I really, really liked the first four stanzas... but I wasn' too thrilled with the rest [except the very last one]. I don't know why. Maybe because of the begging? I don't know. Otherwise, very, very good job. Keep it up. | |
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